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Celebrities such as actors, athletes earn large salaries compared to other professionals. Some people consider this unfair, while others think that celebrities deserve to be paid a lot for the work they do. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion on the subject.

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Nowadays, famous personalities
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 as football players, actors or singers have a large
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, while other
people
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 can earn less than them.
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, it seems unfair to the rest of society.
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, some
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 may think that it’s not true. In
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 essay, I will explore both views and
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 I would like to give my opinion.
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 of all, fame is very ephemeral these days.
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, one who is well-known today can be forgotten
next
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 month. So, in my opinion, household names should be paid more because their occupations are unpredictable.
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, famous
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 can generate more money than they are being paid.
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, in musical concerts, there will be created lots of job opportunities for society and many
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 can be occupied in catering or logistics.
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, many prominent
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 spend their budget on charity organisations. So, their
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 will back to the community.
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, some
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 may argue that it won’t be justifiable
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 if a minority group of
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 as Hollywood actors have generous salaries.
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, most of their fame is the result of the press and not because of their academic and educational skills.
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, most spent lots of time and effort at universities in order to have a large
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 in their career. In my point of view, celeb’s
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 should be counted based on the amount of money they can generate. To sum up, I agree with the
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 opinion.
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, we shouldn’t ignore the fact that
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 not only does everybody haven’t the talent to be a professional artist or athlete, but
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 staying famous needs funds.
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, celebs’
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 should be proportional to their skills.
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