Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People are having a hard time reaching
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on whether the number of boys and girls in all subjects of
universities
should be equal. From my perspective, I completely disagree with
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that the number of male
students
should be as many as
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a female
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female
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females
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in every subject. Some people tend to think that men
also
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was only done by women, and vice versa. As far as I am concerned,
this
view may be based on the consideration regarding gender equality.
However
, we must recognize the fact
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some kinds of jobs are only fit for
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a particular
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gender.
For example
, it is consensus that
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most
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the most
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time
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times
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the majority of nurses in hospitals consist of females
instead
of males. If
universities
recruit boys as many as girls, it would be difficult for many boys to find decent jobs after graduation. Obviously, there are several merits that there are
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the different
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proportion
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proportions
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of men and women learning different majors in
universities
.
Firstly
, after graduation,
students
would not be worried about finding jobs hardly because
universities
accept
students
according to the marketing requirements.
Secondly
, there would be
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students
giving up their subjects due to the reason that
universities
accepted them for balancing the proportion of gender.
For example
, women are good at taking care of patients so
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they may get higher
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GPAs
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than men in the nursing major.
As a result
,
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GPA might
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influence
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many
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students
on building up confidence or even abandon their
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studies
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. In conclusion, my view is
universities
should not
enroll
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the same number of male and female
students
in every subject.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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