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More and more people want to own items by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Is it a negative or positive impact?

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In the modern era of globalization, many individuals wish to buy
products
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 from international brands. In my ,opinion there are several reasons to do
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, and it is not so beneficial to do so. Both the reason and my opinion are discussed
further
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. Discussing the causes of the public using expensive
products
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, the foremost one is that an individual wants to show off, or It is like a status symbol these days.
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, to look rich and successful in life, the crowd often buy these things. A good illustration is that on days like Boxing day or Black Friday, crowds gather around big malls to buy international
products
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 at
a cheaper rates
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a cheaper rate
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 to look rich.
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 to
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, these big recognized companies had created a monopoly due to which the public is forced to buy them. They do
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 to increase their annual revenue
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 and finish the competition in the market.
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, Apple's laptop does not allow users to connect to an android device, in order to connect an individual needs to buy an iPhone.
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, Due to high demand, scammers are making
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-copy of these famous items.
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, an individual cannot differentiate between buying these fake items at
a lower prices
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a lower price
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.
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, fake Apple AirPods are easily available on the marketplace or online.
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, humans are so obsessed with these things that they overspend. For illustration, there are many lady's bag companies that sell their
products
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 at a whopping price.
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, to conclude, it can be
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 commented that there are many downsides to doing
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. The reason and the merits of doing it would be creating a fake society image, a monopoly in
market
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the market
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 and overspending for seekers to purchase these things.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prestigious
  • luxury
  • prevalent
  • trendsetter
  • aspiration
  • exclusivity
  • craftsmanship
  • sustainable
  • conspicuous consumption
  • status symbol
  • brand loyalty
  • consumerism
  • advertising
  • marketing
  • economic growth
  • wealth disparity
  • materialistic
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