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Some pople think that students should be taught how to manage money in primary schools and secondary schools because it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree?

#pople #students #money #schools #life #skill
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The graph illustrates the recycling
percentages
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 of
waste
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 in the U.S. from 1960 to 2011 and the total
waste
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recovery
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 in million tons during these
years
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. Beginning from 1960, the recycling
rate
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 remained almost constant for the
first
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 three
years
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 with
percentages
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 being less than 7, but after that, it gradually increased and reached 34.7% in 2011.
On the other hand
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,
waste
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recovery
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 has shown a slight increase from the start. The major hike is witnessed from the year 1990 to 1995 when the
waste
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recovery
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 shooted from 33.2% to 55.8%. In comparison with recycling
percentages
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, it is seen that the
waste
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recovery
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 was lesser in the initial
years
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, but it raised from the year 1970 and stood more than the recycling
rate
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 till 2011. The
waste
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 recycling
rate
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 showed the greatest increase in the two
years
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 after 1985 and 1990 when
percentages
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 increased from nearly 5% and 9% respectively. Overall, we can conclude that the recycling
rate
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 and the volume of the
waste
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 recovered are greatest in the year 2011 because the graph shows an increasing trend throughout.
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