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Some argue that patriotism is the primary cause of wars globally. Others feel that it serves to prevent less ethical politicians from running a country and starting wars.

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the change
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 three different
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types
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 young adults between 1975 and 2000. As an overall
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trend
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chips
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cunsumption
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 pointed out a tremendous increase, as it started from 10
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 it reached a plateau
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 100
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 in 1995. People loved Pizzas as well, as the trend of Pizzas is generally increased for 25 years.
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 is different. Its starting point is the same as that of hamburgers at 10
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 30
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Chips
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. People loved Fish and Chips in 1975 and 1990 as it reached the highest point
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nationalism
  • xenophobia
  • aggressive policies
  • accountability
  • diplomacy
  • national unity
  • ethical political leadership
  • extreme patriotism
  • patriotic sentiment
  • diplomatic solutions
  • internal conflicts
  • external conflicts
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