Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some part of the population
think
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thinks
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that the government should invest a part of the people's
money
in
the
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apply
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public services, but others
are not agree
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do not agree
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with
this
statement. I reckon that it could be a positive and a negative thing. Nowadays, our society needs our investment and help. We can see a lot of problems in different areas
such
as the bad quality of the school, medical care system and
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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roads, which destroy the whole infrastructure of the city.
Although
it's a hard job to increase considerably the condition of the hospital, the government should take
small
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a small
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cuantity
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quantity
of
money
from the population and
to
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apply
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invest in public services.
For instance
, in the UK, the government takes a certain percentage of
money
from the workers and
use
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uses
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them properly, investing them in the country's needs. In fact,
this
prosper
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prospers
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significantly the wealth of the state. My take on the
second
statement, people might disagree with high taxes because
pleny
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plenty
of them are living in a corrupted state, and don'
t
earn much
money
to be able to live normally.
Population
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don'
t
believe that their
money
will go to the state's needs.
Nevertheless
, if they had earned much more
money
for a better life, they wouldn'
t
have rejected that kind of
taxes
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tax
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.
For example
, I live in a poor country where the level of
the
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apply
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corruption is high.
Meanwhile
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,Meanwhile
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the salaries are too small,
my
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and my
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nation can'
t
afford
paying
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to pay
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high taxes. In a nutshell, I think it's a good idea to contribute
for
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to
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our country, but we should be well informed
where
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about where
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the
money
are
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is
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going and for what they were used.
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