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Nowadays children has become more addicted to TV and because of that their physical activity level is decreasing. What can be the cause and possible solution to that?

#children #tv #activity #level
In
this
 day and age, the vast majority of youngsters could not live a day without sophisticated technologies
such
 as TV, smartphone, laptop and etc.
Consequently
, more and more undergraduates are suffering
with
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 low physical activity which causes both psychological and physical obstacles. In the forthcoming
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this
 essay will discuss its possible consequences and solution with relevant examples.
First
 and foremost, Not getting enough physical activity could lead to heart
diseases
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 even for people who have no other risk factors. It can
also
 increase the likelihood of developing other heart disease risk factors, including obesity, high blood pressure, and type 2 diabetes. On top of that, the mental health of
individual
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 could
be significantly deteriorated
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 since
the
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poor condition of health would entirely ruin the appeal of the individual. As a matter of fact, approximately 70
percent
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 of people who are struggling
against
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 obesity and heart issues tend to be in depression and
anxiety
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.
Therefore
, being sluggish because of addiction to
technologies
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technology
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 will considerably harm both physical and mental
condition
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conditions
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.
On the other hand
, in order to get rid of
this
 paramount problem
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parents should consider measures.
In other words
, the guardians should make a proper talk with
offspring
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 and make an attempt to convince them about
dramatic
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 consequences of it.
As a result
, a youngster may realise the importance of
current
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 issue and begin to decrease
the
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screen time step by step. To conclude, even though being indolent is quite harmful
for
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 undergraduates,
however
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 it could be effortlessly solved by a proper talk between parent and offspring.
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