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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while other thinks that it is essential for the human kind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #space #exploration #waste #resources #universe
With the development of technologies,
the
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science
 goes deeper into
the
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space
exploration
. Sometimes,
this
 process faces different issues connected with religion and morality. Some people believe that at some point it is necessary to stop universe
exploration
. The question here is where is the border indicating
that is
 it necessary to stop and how to assess that
this
 border is left behind. According to my opinion, there is no reason to stop research in any
science
. All the achieved results and developed technologies that people have nowadays are the results of
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 curiosity of humanity. During the universe
exploration
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 some great discoveries can be made, and these discoveries can help to solve
problems
 existing on earth nowadays.
For example
, scientists can find some non-obvious ways to solve
problems
 of global warming or deforestation.
That is
 why, according to my opinion, the decision to stop the
proccess
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process
 of development of any
science
 looks strange.
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other hand
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, it is not a secret that some discoveries and technologies made by people are used for harm. The same approach can be used for space
exploration
.
Instead
 of knowledge usage and solving existing
problems
, humanity can decide to go to
other planet
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another planet
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, occupant them and continue to create garbage on other planets. Summing up the considered points of view, in my opinion, it is important to emphasize that knowledge does not make damage
themselves
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. Everything depends on the way of their
usage
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. The
exploration
 of space will not lead to
further
problems
 if it is used based on the principles of humanism.
That is
 why it is not necessary to restrict the
developing
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 of any
science
 but increase and maintain the moral principles in
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous expenditure
  • pressing issues
  • proportion
  • scientific discoveries
  • technological advancements
  • resource limitations
  • overpopulation
  • habitable planets
  • international cooperation
  • unifying endeavor
  • innovation
  • boost the economy
  • job creation
  • private sector investments
  • critics argue
  • benefits gained
  • space industry
  • potentially offer solutions
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