Nowadays, people have developed poor eating habits and do not eat balanced diet. What are the reasons behind this? Suggest possible solutions to control this.

Nowdays
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, many
people
eating
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eat
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more fast
food
and do not like to eat balanced
food
and still
not
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do exercise in a day.Because of,
this
reason
make
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most of
persons
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the persons
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have
obesity
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.
However
, why do
people
enjoy eating poor
food
and have developed
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this
way?
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with,
this
have
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some reasons why
majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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prefer fast
food
more than green
food
or balance
food
.
Firstly
, now many
people
are more occupied than before, and that makes
people
want to quickly eat
food
and go find or work a job that
him
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or
her
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has because nowadays there are events and more things to do.
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, in
former
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days majority of
people
were free
time
more
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than now,
that
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which
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made former
people
have
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time
to
made
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diet
food
and exercise so,that make
food
culture
was not increase
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.
Secondly
,
this
reason is related to the
first
reason. Some
food
companies
develop more fast
food
due to everyone needing more
time
to do something that they want to do.
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, when you have working now and will be sent in
next
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the next
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days
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that will make you not have more
time
to eat good
food
so, now fast
food
is a good choice for you. In the
last
,
this
paragraph will demonstrate the best solution
in
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apply
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now.
This
solution is for the government to enact legislation
to
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for
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companies
in the country to allow citizens to work no more than 8 hours per day and 48 hours per week. In conclusion,
people
are eating
more
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poorer nutrition because
occupie
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occupied
occupier
and development of
food
companies
and
solution
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the solution
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is government to enact legislation for
there
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their
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companies
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • poor eating habits
  • unhealthy food
  • fast food
  • convenience
  • advertising
  • nutrition
  • financial constraints
  • emotional eating
  • peer pressure
  • hectic work schedules
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • junk food
  • processed food
  • nutrient-rich
  • obesity
  • health consequences
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