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Some People say that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and age together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

#people #music #culture #age
The figure beneath consists of two parts,
first
 a chart which illustrates the values of a country's exports in different objects, petroleum
products
, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
 and textiles in 2015 versus 2016. The
second
 part shows a table which indicates the percentage change in mentioned categories. In summary, in decreasing order, textiles increased dramatically as its growth rate was 15
/
24 % the
second
 one is engineered goods as it had a growth of approximately 8
/
5% the
third
 is petroleum
products
 as it had a raise of 3% and
finally
, the
last
 one, is agricultural
products
 it escalated by 0
/
81%.
In contrast
, all of them had sharply increased except gems and jewellery which decreased by around 5
/
18%.
In addition
, of those which increased all of them had a raise of more than 1% except the agricultural
products
.
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