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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
In the current digitalized era, technological advancement has been promoted
into
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 a different level. It is argued that one of the greatest innovations nowadays is
driverless
vehicles
 where human is only
to
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be passengers inside. For sure, there is
upside
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 and downturn
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this
 innovation from my perspective. One of the upsides is
improvement
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 in
economy
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. Many
countries
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 economical
situation
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 depend on technological investment.
For example
, Tesla is one of the biggest innovators and producers of
driverless
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the driverless
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car
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. The company is registered
in
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American
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 stock exchange that has magnetized investors from around the World.
This
 has created a positive impact
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American
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 economy.
In addition
, we can see from
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 that are a lot of road accidents
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 by
reckless
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a reckless
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driver
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. In
this
 case, when
traveling
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 by
driverless
vehicles
,
it
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reduces
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 possibility of road accidents.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks regarding
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driverless
vehicles
 which due to the price of
vehicles
. To release these kinds of
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 products, there must be different costs for innovation and production. For sure,
burden
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 will be pushed
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the customer
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customer
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customers
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 that
price
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 tend to be higher
comparing
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 to
vehicles
 that require
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the driver
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driver
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drivers
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 to operate.
Furthermore
, rules and regulations should be set by the government. In some countries, there are strict legal requirements related to transportation. Government should consider the prohibition of
this
 type of
vehicles
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 to balance between country’s readiness
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needs
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 and wants of
people
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. In conclusion, whether
driverless
vehicles
 have more advantages or disadvantages is a question to be analyzed and answered carefully. Each individual should carefully set the importance
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 the best outcome.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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