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Band 7.5

Your Friend wants to send his/her children to your house for the weekend. Write a letter to him/her and say: - Agree to this arrangement - Say what time is suitable for you - Describe what are you planning to do

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Dear Adam, I hope you're doing well!! Getting back to you on your request. I'
m
 thrilled to know that you're planning to send your kids to my house
this
 weekend. I'll have certain special preparation for them. I've a plan to cook something delicious for them
along with
 that I can take them to Wonderland. Isn't it a good idea? I will be finishing my work on Friday around 5 o'clock in the evening. As you know, I work from home,
thus
, I would be able to finish my cleaning and shopping by 8 p.
m
. You can come and drop your children to my house on Saturday morning at any time that suits you best. I'
m
 going to cook- pasta, noodles, pancakes, and potato fries for them. Plus, I have booked 4 tickets for the water park for me and my husband
along with
 your two kids. I'
m
 gonna try my best to make them feel comfortable with us.
Also
, I have a plan for a movie night on Saturday at 10 p.
m
. Don't worry about the little ones, it's gonna be real fun
this
 weekend. Yours loving, Navneet.
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single idea per paragraph
Consider breaking up longer paragraphs to improve readability and ensure each paragraph covers a single idea.
coherence cohesion
Be cautious about slight grammatical and punctuation issues, though they do not heavily impact your score, refining these aspects will enhance clarity.
task achievement
You clearly agreed to the arrangement, specified a suitable time, and described your plans in detail. This shows you have fully addressed the task.
task achievement
Your tone is friendly and welcoming, which is appropriate for the context of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well-executed, lending a personal touch to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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