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Some people today have argued that countries should interfere less in the affairs of other nations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years there are a lot of debates
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countries
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 should meddle in the politics of others. Personally, I tend to agree with
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 position for a number of reasons that will be discussed
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 in
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 essay. The main reason why I support
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 view is the formal definition of the
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.
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 is a sovereign entity with its own laws, so other
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 have to respect
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, which means not interfering in the
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's affairs.
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, interference by one
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 in the politics of another may be seen by the international community as a non-acceptance of the status of sovereignty. There are quite a number of examples from history
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 when one
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 interfered in
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another and it ended and it ended up as a war criminal act.
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, nations have a huge amount of differences, so only their governments know how
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 should conduct business. Even when other
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 want to help, rather than hinder, it can be a disservice because of
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 of understanding
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 specific features. Every
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 has its own history, geographic characteristics, culture, social norms and values.
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 fruitful decisions for one nation can be very destructive for another.
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, the result of aid to poor
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 by developed
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 can be described as painful. The ideas that were invented in the
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 world
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 are only suitable for its conditions, for the
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 world these solutions are destructive. Taking all the evidence into consideration, I believe that every
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 has to mind its own affairs and not those of others. Some “helping” can be a dangerous intention to destroy another nation, while others can be irrelevant because of differences between the
countries
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