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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

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 a bunch of
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 and historical
sites
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 are mostly paid to visit by
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travelers
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travellers
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 but not regional
people
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.
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 grave problem of how to attract more area
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 to pay a call to these places. Without a shadow of a doubt,
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travelers
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go to visit a wealth of
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 and historical
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 but the local
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 do not.
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, because local
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 have been to those places too many times and from there it leads to boredom,
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 wanting to go anymore.
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, tourists find serious, interesting, vibrant and diverse cultures in other countries, so
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 and historical
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 attract a wealth of tourists.
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, Sword Lake in Hanoi attracts
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travelers
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 ranging from Asia to Europe but local
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 seldom come here.
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, the tourists find these places more interesting than the regional
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. It is obvious to note how to attract more area
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 to pay a call to
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 and historical
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. The government should organize many folk festivals, which
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people
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 interested and pay a call to historical
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.
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,
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 are capable of organizing cultural and historical introduction sessions in the form of vivid video projections to attract local
people
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.
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 , on the occasion of Tet, the Temple of Literature opens fairs for
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 to travel in spring and purchase lucky items.
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, organizing festivals is one of the methods to attract the local
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. In conclusion,
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travelers
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travellers
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 are
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more fancy
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on
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to
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museums
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 and historical
sites
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 than the regional
people
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, holding festivals is the optimal tactic to attract more local
people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Take for granted
  • Economical constraints
  • Routine obligations
  • Programming
  • Cater
  • Engagement
  • Community involvement
  • Personal connection
  • Cultural relevance
  • Discounts
  • Sense of ownership
  • Interactive exhibits
  • Local traditions
  • Field trips
  • Cultural bond
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