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Young people are leaving their home from rural areas to study at work in cities. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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Major
cities
' populations are increasing constantly because they provide
people
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lot
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 opportunities. So many young
people
 immigrate to these
cities
 from smaller ones or villages. I believe advantages are more than disadvantages. At
first
, moving to a big city could have been seen as difficult because students go far from their families, friends and whole childhood
life
.
Also
, living in a city is expensive and exhausting. Plus, sometimes could be dangerous.
People
 are more depressed and poor in
cities
 because they struggle with so many problems.
However
, if
people
 always stay in the same area, they couldn't improve their vision and meet new
people
. Moving to a new place is hard for families or elder
people
 because they have roots and they are not independent of each other while younger are freer than them.
On the other hand
, leaving the comfort zone is the
first
 step to personal development. When students get into a new society, they could define themselves as a person, apart from their families.
Moreover
,
cities
 provide many conferences, libraries or beneficial activities to students. All these events are helping their professional
life
. While
cities
 have many options for everybody, rural areas haven't any. After graduation,
people
 could find a well-paid job and live a nice
life
. To sum up, there are some advantages or disadvantages of moving to a different city.
This
 could be hard at
first
 but it would be an asset to a person who is moving. There are a lot of option and change to get a better
life
.
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