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In theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In the modern era of globalization, many
companies
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potray
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portray
that
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their
product
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is
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as
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 the latest. There are several reasons to do
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, and it is not beneficial to do so. Both the reason and my opinion are discussed
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. Discussing the pessimistic influence of the presence of the
companies
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 , the foremost one is that a brand wants to increase
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 annual revenue.
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, they spend a huge amount of money to promote. A good illustration is that
,
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 educational
companies
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 like BYJUS had made a contract with
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 board of India to promote their application.
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cut-throat competition in the market,
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 order to remain on top or in business, they often promote their
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.
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,
falsely
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 claims by
companies
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 are increasing .
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, Toothpaste brands often claim themselves as
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 number one toothpaste brand or claim themselves as dentist
recomended
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recommend
, which is not true.
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, sometimes brands overspend on marketing, and they
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its
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 users by promoting the
product
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, and often
sale
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sell
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its
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their
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product
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 at a loss in order to acquire new users.
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,
new
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 business spent millions in marketing and
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file
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 for a bankruptcy
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, to conclude, it can be
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 commented that there are many dismissive on business promote . The reasons and the merits of doing so prove that it would be both passion and job satisfaction for the seeker to change their position.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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