In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
In
modern
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the modern
world
teenagers have Add a comma
,world
opportunity
to take a gap year for travelling or working.
Many Correct article usage
the opportunity
parent
believes Change to a plural noun
parents
that is
a great an
opportunity to gain knowledge and experience before starting education. Correct article usage
apply
However
, despite the many advantages
there are Add a comma
,advantages
also
downsides associated with such
an arrangement.
One evident benefit of taking a year off is that it enable
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enables
greater
understanding of our needs in future life. Correct article usage
a greater
In other words
, we can use this
time for finding our way and decide what we are going to do after this
short break. To illustrate it, majority
of young people don’t know what is their strong side or which field of Correct article usage
the majority
studies
they should choose. A result of taking time off is selecting a proper direction. Fix the agreement mistake
study
In addition
, there are a lot of occasions to earn money. Undoubtedly, period
of 12 months is rich in space to try oneself in various professions. Namely, we might be a shop assistant or waiter in the restaurant.
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a period
On the other hand
, there are obvious disadvantages for
having one year break from learning. Change preposition
to
Firstly
, it would mean for some universities that we aren’t appropriate
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an appropriate
the appropriate
candidate
. Fix the agreement mistake
candidates
For instance
, our knowledge and ability to learn could be not good as before. It means, that we might have problems with topics and passing exams. Secondly
, it is observed that a huge amount of youth persons
are not taking any activities. They waste time by not developing. Which can result in a lack of desire for Replace the word
people
further
education.
In summary, deciding to start the next
level of education later involves many opportunities and risks. It is important to choose your next
step in life appropriately and responsibly.Submitted by nataliejakubowska on
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