In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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world
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teenagers have
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to take a gap year for travelling or working. Many
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a great
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opportunity to gain knowledge and experience before starting education.
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, despite the many
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there are
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downsides associated with
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an arrangement. One evident benefit of taking a year off is that it
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greater
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understanding of our needs in future life.
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, we can use
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time for finding our way and decide what we are going to do after
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short break. To illustrate it,
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of young people don’t know what is their strong side or which field of
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they should choose. A result of taking time off is selecting a proper direction.
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, there are a lot of occasions to earn money. Undoubtedly,
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of 12 months is rich in space to try oneself in various professions. Namely, we might be a shop assistant or waiter in the restaurant.
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, there are obvious disadvantages
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having one year break from learning.
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, it would mean for some universities that we aren’t
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candidate
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.
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, our knowledge and ability to learn could be not good as before. It means, that we might have problems with topics and passing exams.
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, it is observed that a huge amount of youth
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are not taking any activities. They waste time by not developing. Which can result in a lack of desire for
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education. In summary, deciding to start the
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level of education later involves many opportunities and risks. It is important to choose your
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step in life appropriately and responsibly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
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  • Academic trajectory
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