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Playing games teaches us about life. Do you agree or disagree with this statment? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Games
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 have been played
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forever, and we enjoy as well as learn by playing them.Some
people
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 might consider them a waste of time.
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,I fully support the idea that they teach us about different phases and factors of
life
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 as how to behave
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 a victory,how to stand straight
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 a defeat and the importance of corporation.
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,rejoicing win without hurting the sentiments of others is an important lesson taught by
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.Boosting and being arrogant on a win is not considered
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ideal behaviour throughout the world.
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 why,most of the great players stay humble while
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 ones who do not,it becomes very depressing for them when
life
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 puts them in their place.
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,Messi displayed
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great moral character
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 his world cup win which was appreciated across the globe and
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 inspired
people
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.
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,
sports
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 are a great teacher to learn behaviours,when
life
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 gives a win.
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,some
people
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 can not handle losses and
games
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 are a great way to teach them.Some
people
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 become depressed when
life
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 puts them in a difficult position,so it is very important to learn how to face loss.To illustrate,Alamgir khan was a Pakistani squash world champion,who
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 faced some losses but did not give up and eventually became
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 consecutive squash champion in
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history.
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,
sports
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 inculcate
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high spirits in the personality and do away with depression.
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vitality
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 of the corporation in
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 can
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 be learnt by playing a game.Many
sports
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 today are played with a team,through which the importance of teamwork is realized.
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,eleven players in cricket play alongside each other and only through mutual hard work and team play they are able to win.
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,
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 are a great source of producing cooperation in
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society. To summarise,sporting events and
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 teach us about the ups and downs of
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.In order to create a healthier society,
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 activities must be promoted.
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