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Some people think governments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe the administration must rise the demand for
fuel
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 for vehicles and other vehicles which do not
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fuel
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 as the solution to environmental problems. In my opinion,
cars
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 which produce carbon dioxide and emissions have a lot of negative influence on the environment. As the result, we should avoid using
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 kind of vehicle. has been On the
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 hand, carbon dioxide which includes car smokes me
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 of the biggest problems in the world. And our planet warming continually. If we keep using
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 which
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fuel
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, We will face a really hard situation soon.
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,
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 is not a renewable energy resource. It will end
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 day. Before it happens, we have to reduce
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 usage
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 we have to
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 it for more important things.
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 of the best solutions that government can make is to increase the cost of
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 for
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.
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, Most vehicles which
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 renewable energy are more dramatic to
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 than traditional
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 ,especially in cold areas.
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, in my ,country it reaches minus 40 degrees Celcius in winter. So most
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 which
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 electricity and hydrogen become hard to start sometimes they do not start.
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 that people who live in our country rather than traditional
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 . And most of them do have not got
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financial capability. It is the only reason that I stand against
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 topic In conclusion, we do not have the power that can stop global warming and the only thing that we can do is prepare and reduce its process. and as said increasing demand for
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