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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number
people
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of people
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 claim that a state should
straive
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strive
 to produce all the
food
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 for feeding its society and try to reduce
amount
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the amount
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 of
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import
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imports
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 as much as possible, while I completely disagree with
this
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 opinion. Due to the fact that what I believe is
import
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one
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is one
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 of the most important
sources
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 of way to supply
food
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.
To begin
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 with, trying to grow up all the grains and bring up different
food
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 resources may not be possible for every
nations
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nation
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 which
have
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has
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 lived
various
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in various
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parts
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 of the
world
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. To illustrate, there are some countries
can
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that can
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 not carry out agrarian activities like Finland and Norway. It is known that these provinces are
asumed
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assumed
 the coldest
ares
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areas
area
of
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in
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 the
world
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.
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, no one can deny that due to
lack
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the lack
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 of adequate land and
inappropreate
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inappropriate
 weather conditions to do agricultural activities, they ought to purchase
food
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 to feed
thier
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their
 citizens.
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, if we consider
inabilities
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the inabilities
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 of some countries which suffer from
vary
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the vary
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 of difficulties, we
con not
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cannot
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 evaluate
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import
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imports
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 as
drawback
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a drawback
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.
On the other hand
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, there are
also
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 many
parts
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 which can provide nutrition
sources
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 for their communities
such
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 as
mediterrian
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Mediterranean
 provinces.
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, İtaly, Greece and Turkey are able to grow up the grain which they need and bring up
different
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a different
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type
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types
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 of animals to eat. Not only do these countries ensure
sufficent
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sufficient
sources
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 to feed their people, but
also
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 can export some of their products. In fact, these states
shoul
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should
 try to produce all of their needs, because
this
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 possession can consider an advantage for holding
essential
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an essential
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 position to provide
food
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sources
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other
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in other
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parts
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 of the
world
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. Yet, it can be said just limited
ereas
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areas
 which
contitutes
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constitutes
 a
litte
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little
 part of the earth. If
the
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all
parts
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 of the
world
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 had ensured their
food
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sources
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, it would be possible to evaluate
they
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their
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 equal conditions.
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However
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 it is not. To sum up,
although
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 some people believe that every country should produce all the
food
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 for its community and
import
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 should
be hold
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be held
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 at
minimum
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a minimum
the minimum
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 level, I am not convinced truth of
this
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 opinion. It
seem
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seems
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 to me that
import
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one
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is one
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 of the most important aspects of supplying nutrition to society
,
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apply
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 because many nations do not have
capabilities
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the capabilities
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 to ensure their needs in terms of
food
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.
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