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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A number of people claim that a state should
straive
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strive
 to produce all the
food
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 for feeding its society and try to reduce
amount
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the amount
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 of
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import
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 as much as possible, while I completely disagree with
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 opinion. Due to the fact that what I believe is
import
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one
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 of the most important
sources
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 of way to supply
food
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.
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 with, trying to grow up all the grains and bring up different
food
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 resources may not be possible for every nation which has lived in various parts of the world. To illustrate, there are some countries
can
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 not carry out agrarian activities like Finland and Norway. It is known that these provinces are assumed the coldest areas of the world.
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, no one can deny that due to the lack of adequate land and inappropriate weather conditions to do agricultural activities, they ought to purchase
food
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 to feed their citizens.
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, there are
also
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 many parts which can provide nutrition
sources
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 for their communities
such
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 as
mediterrian
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Mediterranean
 provinces.
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, İtaly, Greece and Turkey are able to grow up the grain which they need and bring up different types of animals to eat. Not only do these countries ensure sufficient
sources
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 to feed their people, but
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 can export some of their products. Yet, it can be said just limited areas
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constitutes
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 a little part of the earth. If all parts of the world had ensured their
food
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sources
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, it would be possible to evaluate
they
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 equal conditions,
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however
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 it is not. To sum up,
although
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 some people believe that every country should produce all the
food
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 for its community and
import
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 should be held at
minimum
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a minimum
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 level, I am not convinced truth of
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 opinion. It seems to me that
import
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 is one of the most important aspects of supplying nutrition to society
,
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 because many nations do not have the capabilities to ensure their needs in terms of
food
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.
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