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Solving environmental problems should be the responsibility of an international organizational rather than each national government. Do you agree or disagree?

#responsibility #government
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Nowadays ,
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the environment
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environment
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environmental
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 issue is getting worse all around the
world
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. Some people think that
this
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issued
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issue
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is sloved
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sloved
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solved
loved
 by an international organisation rather than
national
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the national
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 or state
government
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. I strongly disagree with
this
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 point of view because every nation
suffer
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suffers
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in
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from
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 different sort of
environment
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environmental
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problems
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.
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, I will give my explanation in the ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand, the
government
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 know the environmental
problems
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 of their nation. They can easily recognize and
sloved
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solved
solve
. Some nature issues depend on
climate
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the climate
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 conditions of states or
city
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cities
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.
For example
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, in
india
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India
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, the northern side has located around
mountain
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a mountain
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rang
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range
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. So, in that part melting ice ,
land slides
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landslides
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,
deforestation
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and deforestation
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 problem occurs.
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 , the northern
government
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 are
awer
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aware
 these situations and they tackle
easily
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them easily
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.
Moreover
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, all
countries
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 suffered
sort
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a sort
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 of nature
problems
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. The national
government
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 define solution
on
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to
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 types of
problems
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 which some developing
countries
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 can not follow their decisions.
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,
the
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apply
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new
zealand
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Zealand
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 suffered
extreme
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an extreme
the extreme
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level
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levels
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 of air pollution. So, the New Zealand
government
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 promote public transportation
such
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 as bus,
electrical
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and electrical
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 train than
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a motor
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motor cycle
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motorcycle
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 or personal vehicles.
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,
the
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apply
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carbon dioxide emission has
been
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apply
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decreased.
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,
the
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apply
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developing
countries
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as
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such as
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a
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apply
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India, with different road
network
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networks
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 and traffic volumes . So , it is not
worthy
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worth
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to
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of
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such
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 innovation.
On the other hand
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,
an
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apply
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environmental
problems
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such
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 as
green house
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greenhouse
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 effects, global warming, carbon dioxide emission and climate
changes
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change
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. There are serious
problems
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 around the
world
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. The international organization and national community should
colobration
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collaboration
colouration
 and
sloved
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solved
loved
 together .
In addition
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 , the
world
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protect
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protects
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 environment organization plays a vital role to protect the
world
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. Every year all nation part in
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a committee
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committee
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committees
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 and make
decision
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decisions
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 mutually to save the earth. In conclusion ,
although
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 every
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countries
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country
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 know
their
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its
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 own environmental conditions. So, it is
more
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a more
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 precise way to reduce these
problems
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 if they are dealt
at
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with
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 nationally.
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