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In the future, self-driving cars will replace human drivers. Is this a positive or negative development?

#future #cars #drivers #development
car
 driving is going to change in the
next
 few years
by
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 self-driving
cars
. it is argued
that is
 it safer than driving your own
car
 by yourself or just relying on
the
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computer intelligence.
for
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me
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i
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 tend to support self-driving
cars
 as
i
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 see it much safer. Some people feel that they will not be comfortable if they
doesn’t
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drove
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drive
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 their
car
 by
them self’s
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themself
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, and the idea of depending on the
companies
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 products and
computers
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 technology to do the job
instead
 of them is not a good idea. They see that the
cars
is
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 not like
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airplane
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where
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it
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always flays in specific imaginary line and special
hight
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 level, whereas
cars
is
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 driven in traffic area and some sudden incidence might happen while driving. The other thought
which
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i
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 agree with and
i
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 see
it
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as a positive improvement
that
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is that
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 self-driving
cars
 will have
lower
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a lower
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 risk
fo
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accident
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accidents
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 than human
drive
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. Technologies worldwide are growing and we can see that many tasks are done with very low error
rate
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 by
this
 kind of technology.
For
instance
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 in some recent and modern
cars
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,cars
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 there is
self-parking
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a self-parking
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 mode and some other modes which are done by the
car
 without
the
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human intervention and it is done perfectly by the machine,
other field
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 like medicine we see
this
alot
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a lot
 in different
kind
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 of respiratory support and neurological surgeries.
Thus
 in my opinion
this
 self-driving
cars
 will succeed as
it
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 will keep many legal features like keeping
the
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 distance
form
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from
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 the other
cars
 to help avoid any sudden issue
might
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 happen like some turn his
car
 to your
car
 or
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 suddenly,
also
 maintaining legal speed in the road will help to reduce the accidents. In conclusion, self-driving
car
 is a huge subject,
although
 there is already a company
produce
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self driving
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self-driving
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 vehicles which
is
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 Tessla,
i
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 still believe that other companies will produce self-driving
cars
 in near future and all people will don’t have to drive anymore, they will just enjoy the road without fearing from accidents or paying attention to the other
cars
. I strongly believe as
this
 type of
cars
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 spread and
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being
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 used by all individual there will be
very
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a very
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 low rate of accidents.
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