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Some people think that children should only read academic books. Others believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #children #books #pleasure
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Reading
books
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 is
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 an important habit for children. there is
argument
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 that reading
academic
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an academic
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book
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books
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 should gain all of the focus from kids or they should
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 read for fun. In my
opinion
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 it is both important and just implementing
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 habit in the kids is a great thing to do. Reading academic
books
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 will improve the
child
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child's
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 ability to digest new information easily and be
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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.
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, children will learn way faster than the other age groups, so if he used to read academic
books
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 regularly and
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in
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 early
age
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 he will be smarter than others and will gain the passion to always improve
his self
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, reading
books
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 to enjoy is
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good
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a good
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 thing to do. For me, reading
it self
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itself
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 will always add to you something either new information or widen your language vocabulary and there are some other benefits like improving your imagination, the ability to read faster and so on. In conclusion, reading should be consistent and enjoyable in order to keep it long time habit. To do so you should read both
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 of
books
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, reading shouldn’t be
boring
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a boring
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 task for children so they can get the most benefit from it.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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