It is currently believed that children's behavior and misconduct is due to the lack of strict discipline and punishment applied by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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stirred up controversy widely. I agree to
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certain extent that without discipline and
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punishment
by parents, it can lead to children's behaviour and misconduct. In
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Firstly
, a child should have
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to think and act. Setting up too strict rules will limit the kid to
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out of the box and eventually lead to
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of self-confidence. They will not dare to take any risk or even accept a new challenge in life because they are scared to fail and
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by adults. To illustrate
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if it is wrong unlike the Western
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freely discuss and debate with the instructors.
In addition
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small crime
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, stealing and etc comes from the family that
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set up
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their children. They want to express their feelings and opinions but none of
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member opens their minds to listen. In consequence, they misbehave
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society just to ask for
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from the
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.
Moreover
, violence is not a good
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a kid. It will
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in the kids'
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that using
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is the solution when there is a problem occurs. In consequence, it leads to
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scale, to
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society. Imagine if every child uses weapons,
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as guns, or knives to address a problem. The crime rate
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will dramatically increase and every resident
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to live
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fear. To conclude, being strict with kids does not positively affect young. They should have
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freedom to think, act and choose.
Besides
, it leads to violence in the future.
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