It is currently believed that children's behavior and misconduct is due to the lack of strict discipline and punishment applied by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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certain extent that without discipline and Correct article usage
a
purnishment
by parents, it can lead to children's behaviour and misconduct. In Correct your spelling
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this
essay, my opinion will be further
explained.
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, a child should have freedom
to think and act. Setting up too strict rules will limit the kid to Add an article
the freedom
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lack
of self-confidence. They will not dare to take any risk or even accept a new challenge in life because they are scared to fail and Correct article usage
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be purnished
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point, in the classroom, Asians will not raise a hand to answer or discuss because they do not want to be purnised
if it is wrong unlike the Western Correct your spelling
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freely discuss and debate with the instructors. Correct word choice
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, 75% of teenagers Correct pronoun usage
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a limitation
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attention
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Moreover
, violence is not a good purnishment
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a kid. It will Change preposition
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violent
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such
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freedom to think, act and choose. Correct article usage
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Besides
, it leads to violence in the future.Submitted by minichariie on
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