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Today every large city facing traffic jam problem. what are the causes and how can it tackle

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Nowadays, in many nations especially, developed nations traffic is one of the main issues which societies are struggling with. But what are the reasons for
this
 ongoing matter and what can be done in
order
 to make the condition better? 
To begin
 with, the major reason is, public transportation is not used enough by
people
, as these days, the majority of communities prefer private cars due to the low quality of subways, buses, and taxis.There are many complaints about how unclean these facilities are and waiting time for these machines can be long.
For instance
, in Iran, even though using subways is cheaper
as a result
 of dirty parts
people
 rather use their own cars.
In addition
, the lack of occupation in small
cities
 caused some communities particularly younger generations to move to more modern and larger
cities
such
 as the capital of the country. While in larger
cities
 there is the problem of lack of jobs still
people
 prefer to move as they believe there are more opportunities. As an illustration, due to the research which has been done by reporters, in recent years rural and countryside areas are dealing with a low population as the public migrates to other places.  To address
this
 matter, the government should act as soon as possible, in
order
 to make facilities better areas for the public's usage. Meanwhile, it should
also
 warn
people
 about what happens if they do not use public transportation and
also
 advertise these facilities to attract them by using famous idols.
Furthermore
, there should be some changes in government policy in
order
 for younger generations to have more chances for taking jobs in smaller
cities
,
Therefore
, they decide not to change their hometown. In conclusion, I consider, there are two main reasons for
this
 serious problem which low quality
if
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 public transportation and the lack of jobs,
also
, in
order
 to solve
this
 matter government should take an action.
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