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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers ae not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

#areas #curfew #teenagers #ae #doors #time #night #adult
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In recent
time
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us
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 have applied curfew in
country
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. Since covid have spread all across the world teenagers can't go to school and
colleges
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 but can go outside their house with
adult
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in
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night
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 time.
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perspective
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best
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 law in the world many people that
us
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 country. In my
opinion
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us
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removed
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curfew
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the curfew
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 as soon as possible because
economy
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the economy
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get
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 destroyed and
business
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businesses
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also
 get tarnished. Many children and
teenager
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teenagers
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 can't be able to go to school and
colleges
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college
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.
Their
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 get bored and lazy while
siiting
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sitting
 at home.
Their
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 are not able to perform
exercise
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the exercise
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 and only use technology.
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xbox
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 computer laptop mobile etc As a
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consequence
consquence
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us
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 have done better
atleast
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at least
their
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allow
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 individuals to come out at night while other countries are not allowing that too. But
us
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 have
allowing
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allowed
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 children and
teenager
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teenagers
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 to come out with adults. But
us
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 have opened only important shops like
medical
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a medical
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pharmacy
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pharmacies
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hospital
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 but for
teenagers
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their
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 have closed
resturant
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restaurant
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 and pubs. In
conclusion
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 have taken good care
for
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public
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 because
their
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 have thinking well being for
public
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atleast
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least
us
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 should allow liquor shops to be opened since liquor is very common in us and
also
us
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 should allow
brothel
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 to be opened because many young people live single in us.
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