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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Languages
 play a vital role in globalization. Some
people
 think that we should discover a new
language
for increased
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 connection internationally. There are manifold advantages of inventing a new
language
 which surpasses drawbacks.
Therefore
, I will give an explanation in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are a plethora of benefits to inventing a new
language
.
Firstly
, if
people
 communicate in the same
language
 over the world, they would develop their business globally.
As a result
, increased countries' income.
Secondly
 folk should invent a
language
 at the international level. They can easily learn about different cultures.
For example
, these days English
becomes
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 a universal
language
 in most countries.
Therefore
,
people
 can learn numerous things by using English.
Thirdly
, new
languages
also
 help in the tourism sector.
People
 do not any help from a guide, they easily
understood
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the history and particular places without the help of locals.
However
, there are
also
 several drawbacks to discovering new
languages
. Young
people
 have good grasping power. They can easily learn new things.
On the contrary
, aged
people
 face many difficulties
to learn
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languages
.
In addition
, it
also
 effective those businesses which work locally.
Such
 as tourist guides, if
people
 know the
languages
 which communicate over the world. So, folks do not need any guidance to learn about history, culture and so on. English
becomes
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 universal but some countries like France, do not adopt
this
language
 because they think that when they adopt it, it
would be disappeared
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will disappear
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 from their culture and history. In conclusion,
although
 the invention of a new
language
 gives numerous benefits around the world ,especially in business globalization it leads to advantages more than disadvantages of new
languages
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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