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Some people think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Other think adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities

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An increasing concern for many
people
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 in modern society is the
life
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 of teens and adults, which are better. There are those who believe that the best
time
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 for most
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's
life
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 was
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teenage
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 others believe that
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adult
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 age is the best for taking happiness with vast responsibilities. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there are two main reasons why the public believes that the teenage years are the best
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 for living
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, it gives
people
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 a huge amount of
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. To be precise there is no big work to do during that period, no major tensions, and spend as long as anyone wants to. So,
people
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 can get
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 to prepare for future
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, the public can make mistakes, but they don't have to worry about the result.
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 is because they are getting enough chances to make themselves a better person. in
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 way, every teenager can learn so many things by himself. Despite these arguments, there is a case for the idea that
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life
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 is better for happiness by making money, travelling, purchasing etc. Perhaps the main reason is that an
adult
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 can make his own decision. So that, He/she doesn't need any other opinion before doing any kind of thing.
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 spend their money without asking anyone whether the thing is good or bad.
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,
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 can gain knowledge by taking on big responsibilities.
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, Duties can make a person punctual, self-reliant, take action and mature etc.
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, That person will take any type of greater opportunities, haphazard related work where money connects. In conclusion,
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 is a topic which raises a strong passion on both sides of the argument. My personal view is that
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 age is the best moment to live
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's lives independently.
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