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Some people believe money is best gift for teenagers while others disagree.discuss both views and guve your opinion

#people #money #gift #teenagers #guve
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Gifts
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 are the signs of love. To represent care and love, people give
gifts
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 to each other. Few masses think that
money
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 is a good
gift
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 for teens while others oppose that by saying there are other valuable
gifts
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 that people can choose to give to teenagers. I will discuss both points of view and give my opinion at the end.
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,
this
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 is the modern period and that changes the mind of the teen who is in college. They need various kinds of technology for their studies. Giving
money
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 as a
gift
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 is a good idea
parents
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 can contribute that
money
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 to their education equipment.
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, according to The Times newspaper which has published that over 80% of school
children
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 use modern technology in their studies which includes laptops and computers.
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, presenting
money
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 as a
gift
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 could
also
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 help
children
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 to buy whatever they want.
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, in Indian culture,
parents
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 teach
children
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 that collect
money
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 and in the
,
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end they will help them to buy their favourite things like bicycles or motorcycles or their favourite brand of cellphone.
On the other hand
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, sometimes, collecting large amounts of
money
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 can give negative results too. As teenage is the part of age when their brain catches things easily.
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, merging into bad companies and
children
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 can spend that
money
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 on drugs and other activities that are not good for them.
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, if the
gift
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 is anything rather than
money
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,
children
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 can remember that moment in their whole life and will respect their relatives and
parents
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 for the present. To sum up,
parents
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 should take care of the upbringing of their
children
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 and teach them the importance of
money
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 and
gifts
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 in their life
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