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some people think that giving it to the poor countries has more negative impacts than a positive answer do what extent do you agree or disagree .

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Donating to poor
countries
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 is getting more important than the previous years, whilst some people believe that giving to poor
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 has some drawbacks.
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, other masses regard it as a significant deed. I personally disagree with
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 statement and believe that
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 wealthy
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 should help the deprived
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. In
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 world, there are obviously some inequalities between
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 whereas in the law of human rights money and resources should be equally distributed. To establish equality there is no alternative to providing donations from the
countries
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 who are rich.
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, helping the poor can accomplish the goal of human rights which as well leads to the establishment of a bond between several
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.
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, nowadays, wealthy
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 like Australia, the USA or Canada are providing financial assistance, donations and food relief to the deprived
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 and creating footprints of helping other
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.
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, other masses believe that
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 providing support to the poor has some disadvantages which outweigh the benefits. To illustrate, helping other
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 results in laziness and cause disturbance in productivity. People who are getting donations for a long time can have some reluctance in earning their bread and doing something by themselves. More precisely, there are potential risks of engaging in crime by these people because of their laziness. A recent study from Yale University demonstrated that
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countries
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 that are being donated by rich
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 cannot make proper utilization of their manpower and resources. On balance,
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 helping poor
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 with the rich ones have some demerits I believe that
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 only helping the poor can bring positive change in the world and minimise the difference between rich and poor.

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