Some people say that increasing businesses and cultural contacts between countries is a positive development, while others think that many countries will lose their national identities as a result. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

In the modern era ,
people
can make a bond with other country
masses
with the help of phones . Few individuals think that inclining businesses and cultural contacts between
nations
is a positive growth ,
however
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others are against
this
notion . I totally agree with formal views and will discuss both views along with my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
, with a formal statement .
First
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and foremost reason is
people
get more
knowledge
about new products and those have good value in any kind of work with the help of
countries
can be able to gain more profit in future years or they can set
a new targets
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new targets
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for more gaining .
For example
, in the year , 2015 a survey was conducted by UNO which was indicating 70% of companies grow their new target by increasing contacts with other
nations
.
Moreover
, with the help of cultural contact with other
nations
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people
are getting more
knowledge
about other cultures which help them learn new things from other
nation
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nations
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and it
also
stops
an
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idea of hating
for
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others as well as
it
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maintains good relations with other
countries
.
On the other hand
, with the latter view . Individuals are against upper paragraph views because they think when they start
contacting
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with other cultural
masses
then
maybe they start following other
nations
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nations'
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cultural values and it will
also
impact other
masses
so with it how other
countries
become more multicultural.
For instance
, in the year, 2010 when
people
began the use social media they got more
knowledge
about other cultures of
nation
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the nation
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so with it they changed their lifestyles. In my point of view, when
countries
start good relations in any business field
then
they can set up new brands for other
nation
which will help to incline national income and many
masses
can get jobs under the new companies so the unemployment problem start
goes
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down . In conclusion, good bonds are always creat by talking it is a fact so if
masses
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the masses
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talk to other
nation
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nations
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it will grow the
knowledge
of lifestyle or they can get good manners , but without losing their own cultural values .
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