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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
The given pie charts give information about the differences
regarding
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 how UK citizens spent their
money
 on 7 different sectors over the period of 30 years, starting from 1971. Overall, it can be obviously seen that there was an increase in the percentage of spending on
cars
 and computers, while the opposite trend was seen in food and books.
Furthermore
, the year 1971 witnessed the highest proportion of
money
 spent on food, whereas
cars
 were what people spent most of their
money
 on in 2001. In 1971, people living in the UK used 44% of their total
money
 to buy food,
however
;
this
 figure decreased dramatically by 30 % in 2001. A similar trend was seen in books. People had a tendency to spend less on these items, with 6% and 1% in 1971 and 2001 respectively. The expenditure on furniture and petrol almost stayed unchanged throughout the period, around 9%. In 2001,With the development of technology, most of their
money
 went to technological devices, namely
cars
 and computers.
Cars
 accounted for 22% of the gross amount of
money
 in 1971, which was 2 times lower than the percentage of these 3 decades later.The figure for computers spent by Uk residents rocketed from only 2% in 1971 to more than a fifth in 2001. Restaurants
also
 saw an upward trend in spending, which was 7% in 1971 and 14% at the end of the period.
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