Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the Sahara desert and Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages of visiting this area?

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number of visitors in areas with

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sky

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the Sahara desert of the Antarctic. I will cover

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and drawbacks of

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, there are several advantages to visiting

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this

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places. Natural beauty and peaceful scenery can

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many visitors and in

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tourist spots are crowded to

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and full of tourists.

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, people can experience a different scene when they reach

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destination.

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, humans who climb famous mountains may experience compatibility. On the other side of the matter, there are several disadvantages of

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places. I would like to point out that some humans can be very upset when seeking medical attention

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away.

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to the disadvantages, a certain benefit is the curiosity of people visitors are very curious by nature and they are

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for a once in a lifetime experience. There is no doubt that everyone wants to see something out of the ordinary.

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, they can go to Antarctica to see mountains or penguins. A possible

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is health problems after visiting

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site. Humans need to be in great physical condition to survive in bad weather conditions,

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though it can be harmful

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healthy while

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, a person can catch a cold, and

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cause of lungs problem. In conclusion, I would like to conclude that

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is good, but before

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, we need to take care of our health.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 8.5

Complete response

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251 words

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