Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performances from the screen and no need to watch it live. To what extend do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

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I am overjoyed to have been accepted into Niagara
College
's Postgraduate Certificate program in International
Business
Management (mentioned batch). The session begins on (specify date).
Therefore
, I request your assistance in acquiring a study permit to proceed with my education. My introduction and family background: My name is Shreeya Vashist, and I am from Punjab, India. We are four family members, including me, my mother and
father
, and my elder brother. My
father
worked as an operator at Punjab Water Resources,
whereas
my mother is a housewife. My brother is currently in New Zealand. Life has treated me well. My parents never stopped giving me all the educational tools and help I needed whenever I asked for them. They are my mentors because they taught me to be honest, work hard, be disciplined, and pay attention. My mom is a supportive, loving, and caring homemaker. My
father
has helped me improve my professional skills,
while
my mother has taught me to be respectful, to fear God, and to be grateful for all that life has given us. I learned that magic doesn't make dreams come true. One has to be determined and work hard. Since childhood, my
father
and uncle have had long
business
conversations with me about
business
market trends and predictions. Even though I was listening, these conversations unknowingly taught me the tricks of the trade. I began to collect numerous
business
ideas and concepts. I knew I needed to learn a lot about
business
management when I went to
college
. My Education: I went to Caption AK Fert Model Senior Secondary School in Punjab for all my schooling. Since I was young, I have been interested in accounting and managing money, so getting a bachelor's degree in commerce was a natural choice. I went to Himachal Pradesh University for my graduation and got a CGPA of 7.51
at the end
of the course.
This
program taught me everything I needed to know about financial accounting and
business
management,
as well as
business
law, the basics of economics, and goods and services taxes. I have even finished a certified training centre's online course in financial accounting with advanced GST.
Besides
this
, I
also
passed the test for the domestic data entry operator job. Interests and Achievements: I've been involved in a lot of extracurricular activities in
college
in addition
to my studies. Having the chance to help organize campus events has helped me improve my leadership and public speaking skills. My hobbies include dancing, volunteering for social causes, painting, and doing outdoor activities. I used to play basketball during my school and
college
days and
also
participated in dance activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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