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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the fast pace of industrialization, most
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 cannot develop like rich
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 due to various economic issues.
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 developed
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 providing
money
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 does not solve the poverty issues in non-developed
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 because
money
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 in those
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 does not have value,
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 growing
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 should provide other subsidies. I agree with the statement mentioned above and the following essay will elaborate
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 with examples. Commencing, it is true that today developing
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 and non-developed
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 are unable to overcome the poverty issue, and providing
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 for these
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 means they do not have value since the
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 provided for
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 is not enough to solve the issues.
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, rich
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 should
support
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 poor
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 with things that boost their economy.
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, providing essential resources to improve the health, and education sectors. As an example, there is a rural region in developing
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 where children are unable to access luxury education systems and they don’t have technological advancements in their learning.
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,
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 have to travel miles to consult a doctor for their sickness and these
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 are not capable of building dispensary units in each region.
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, the most essential requirement today in poor
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 is unable to build up in homes. A plethora of individuals
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 living in streets and shady places where they don’t have enough
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 from the government to build their own houses. As an example, in India, one-
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 of the nation's population is living on pavements and some
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 have families where children grow up in these places. Furthermost, if developed
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 provide
support
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 for
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 in providing shelters for
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 it would be much more beneficial for
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 rather than lending
money
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. In conclusion, I agree that rich
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 can help poor
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 to develop in many ways
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 as by providing
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 in the education system, and health, and by building up homes for the needy.

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