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Write about the following topic: Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the fast pace of industrialization, most
countries
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 cannot develop like rich
countries
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 due to various economic issues.
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 developed
nations
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 providing
money
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 does not solve the poverty issues in non-developed
countries
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 because
money
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 in those
countries
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 does not have value,
instead
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 growing
nations
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 should provide other subsidies. I agree with the statement mentioned above and the following essay will elaborate
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 with examples. Commencing, it is true that today developing
countries
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 and non-developed
countries
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 are unable to overcome the poverty issue, and providing
money
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 for these
countries
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 means they do not have value since the
money
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 provided for
nations
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 is not enough to solve the issues.
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, rich
countries
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 should
support
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 poor
nations
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 with things that boost their economy.
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, providing essential resources to improve the health, and education sectors. As an example, there is a rural region in developing
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 where children are unable to access luxury education systems and they don’t have technological advancements in their learning.
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,
people
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 have to travel miles to consult a doctor for their sickness and these
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 are not capable of building dispensary units in each region.
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, the most essential requirement today in poor
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 is unable to build up in homes. A plethora of individuals
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are
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 living in streets and shady places where they don’t have enough
support
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 from the government to build their own houses. As an example, in India, one-
third
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 of the nation's population is living on pavements and some
people
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 have families where children grow up in these places. Furthermost, if developed
countries
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 provide
support
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 for
countries
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 in providing shelters for
people
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 it would be much more beneficial for
people
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 rather than lending
money
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. In conclusion, I agree that rich
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 can help poor
countries
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 to develop in many ways
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 as by providing
support
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 in the education system, and health, and by building up homes for the needy.
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