some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Traffic

accidents

are preventable events that

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costed many lives. Many believed that

drivers

that did not obey the rules should be punished severely to reduce the number of

accidents

, while others argue it would not be effective to improve

road

safety

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should be taken in addressing

this

issue. In my opinion, strict punishment will result in nothing if the

infrastructure

and the

driver’s

understanding of

safety

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riding are inadequate. Given that

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drivers

who are careless,

such

as those who speed, violates the

traffic

lamp, or do not use their sign properly may harm others and themselves, it is reasonable to

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severe sentence for

such

offenders,

for example

by taking their license or jail sentence. Severe

punishments

can create a deterrent effect

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so that the offenders may not repeat their

mistake

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and may influence

other

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not to do the same due to the harsh consequences.

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, the judge will

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sentence a murderer

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in prison, hoping that the perpetrator will not repeat the wrongdoings.

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, strict

punishments

may increase

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road

safety

by

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drivers

to be more careful.

However

, there are many factors that contribute to the

traffic

accidents

,

such

as

infrastructure

and the

driver’s

knowledge of driving.

Firstly

, a slippery or wavy

road

as well as potholes may increase the risk of

traffic

accidents

. Other

infrastructure

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such

as

street

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lamp

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and signs are

also

important to guide the

drivers

.

For example

, many multiple cars

collision

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Indonesian

highway

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occurred due to inadequate lighting and slippery

road

during the rainy season. These events prove that adequate

infrastructure

is needed to improve

road

safety

.

Moreover

, severe punishment means nothing if the

driver’s

knowledge

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how to

drive

safely

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inadequate, because they may violate the rules once there

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no patrol. Increasing the

driver’s

awareness be done by making the driving test stricter and harder so that only capable

drivers

are permitted to

drive

. It is important for

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drivers

to

drive

safely because they understand how to

drive

safely, not just because of the

punishments

. In conclusion, severe

punishments

are not the sole solution to increase

road

safety

. Improvement of

infrastructure

as well as increasing the

driver’s

knowledge may

also

beneficial

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in reducing the number of

accidents

.