some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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are preventable events that

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costed many lives. Many believed that

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that did not obey the rules should be punished severely to reduce the number of

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, while others argue it would not be effective to improve

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should be taken in addressing

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issue. In my opinion, strict punishment will result in nothing if the

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and the

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understanding of

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riding are inadequate. Given that

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who are careless,

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as those who speed, violates the

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lamp, or do not use their sign properly may harm others and themselves, it is reasonable to

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offenders,

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by taking their license or jail sentence. Severe

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can create a deterrent effect

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so that the offenders may not repeat their

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not to do the same due to the harsh consequences.

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in prison, hoping that the perpetrator will not repeat the wrongdoings.

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may increase

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drivers

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to be more careful.

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, there are many factors that contribute to the

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accidents

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,

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as

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and the

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knowledge of driving.

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, a slippery or wavy

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as well as potholes may increase the risk of

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. Other

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as

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and signs are

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important to guide the

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occurred due to inadequate lighting and slippery

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during the rainy season. These events prove that adequate

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is needed to improve

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safety

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.

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, severe punishment means nothing if the

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knowledge

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how to

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safely

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inadequate, because they may violate the rules once there

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no patrol. Increasing the

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awareness be done by making the driving test stricter and harder so that only capable

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are permitted to

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. It is important for

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drivers

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to

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safely because they understand how to

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safely, not just because of the

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. In conclusion, severe

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are not the sole solution to increase

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safety

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. Improvement of

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as well as increasing the

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knowledge may

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in reducing the number of

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