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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 modern era, the advent of technology has brought many advantages and disadvantages to our life. the approach to how the public meets each other has changed.it is true that the internet brings a lot of convenience to our lifestyle,
however
,
this
 has some detrimental consequences.in
this
 essay I want to examine whether is it a positive development or a negative one. On the one hand, there are compelling reasons that automation has become a useful advent. nowadays many folks go abroad due to work or study so they need to see their family.in
this
 time it comes
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the internet to demolish long distances and human beings will be able to make video calls.
in addition
, crowds can attend international conferences from all over the world virtually, due to the coronavirus pandemic many universities and offices goes down,
nevertheless
 , students and employees were able to attend in their workplaces without going out of their houses,
furthermore
 ,many nations can earn money with establish a shopping website without interaction with buyers.
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, humans need to interact with others, make a conversation with others and feel good, sometime everyone should make face-to-face interaction,
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 there is no difference between humans and robots. today most of the conversations are hidden behind smartphones, and most of the laughs and cries turn into emojis. The grandmothers and grandfathers who dint know how to use machinery have missed their children and their grandsons need to visit and had a talk. To sum up, technology could be positive or negative but, in my opinion, the advantages of the way it changes interaction among community outweigh its drawbacks.
this
 is a modern era and automation must be expanded to bring convenience to our lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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