some people believed that government should make sure to make people to go on a diet. while others believe that the individuals need to take care of their own diet and health. discuss both views and give your opinion
Population
fitness is one of the authority's responsibilities, hence
many argue that the authority should enforce their population
to do
a healthy Unnecessary verb
apply
diet
. However
, many contradict this
idea and believe fitness is individual responsibility. In my personal opinion, going on a diet
is individual rights
and Fix the agreement mistake
right
people
should have choices on how to do it.
Governments are responsible to ensure the basic rights
of their people
, including health
. With the increasing number of metabolic diseases, such
as diabetes and stroke, it is reasonable for the government to prevent mortality and morbidity by enforcing their citizens to go on a diet
and take care of their health
. This
can be done by routine health
status monitoring in the appointed local clinic, and if the results of the tests are unsatisfactory, the government may give them several health
regimens to follow such
as a strict diet
and rigorous exercise. This
direct intervention is helpful to prevent the number of metabolic diseases hence
increasing the level of population
health
.
However
, I believe that society should take care of their own well-being since although
health
is basic human rights
, the way of being healthy is a personal choice. There are various approaches to gaining Fix the agreement mistake
right
health
and this
may be different among Add an article
the population
population
, based on their needs and preferences. Fix the agreement mistake
populations
For instance
, many lactose intolerant people
opt to be pescatarians because they can not process lactose or meat, but they are still healthy though their diet
choice is uncommon. The authority have
the responsibility to ensure that their society is healthy, but it does not mean that they have the freedom to control their citizen's life Change the verb form
has
choice
. Fix the agreement mistake
choices
Health
is a personal matter and the one who truly understands what they need is the person itself. Hence
, the public should take good care of their well-being.
In conclusion, even though government
are responsible for its Add an article
the government
people
Change noun form
people's
health
, they have no rights
to interfere with the life choices of its Fix the agreement mistake
right
people
, as health
is a personal matter and individualized.Submitted by rosacea.medicus on
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