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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society?

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 in university has changed from
science
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 study to others in the
last
 several decades in numerous countries.
This
 new phenomenon is caused by several reasons and has an impact on society that will be discussed more in
this
 essay. It is a new fact that people prefer to study management, art or economic studies rather than medical,
mathematic
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 or engineering subjects because of their high difficulty level to finish the study. In
science
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, the students need consistency, discipline and patience to verify some experiments which are mostly needed to pass the final exam.
Therefore
, some
science
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 graduation.
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job opportunities are more restricted for scientists, which makes limited employment.
For example
, electrical engineers can only work in factories, but economists can be hired in the industrial, education, or government sectors.
This
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 decrease in
science
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role
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 in country life.
Moreover
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 scientists leads to
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 slowdown in technology and
medicine
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 development.
For example
, in the
last
 pandemic era, the limited number of doctors and nurses was the most concerning thing because there were many infected people who should be treated by them.
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particular fields will soar and will induce an incline in the rate of unemployment. The Increasing rate number of unemployment due to employment imbalance will burden the state finances. In conclusion, lately, many people tend to avoid
science
 subjects because of the complexity and job possibilities.
This
 trend has brought about the instability of employment rate and
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 which will be a new problem
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 state welfare.
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