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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situations such as an, unsatisfactory job or shortge of money. Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #situations #job #shortge #money
Accepting a bad situation financially is a harakiri. One has to improve his or her financial position or try their level best to work on improving their financial conditions. lack of
money
 creates lots of problems for people who have a shortage of
money
. Few people only take initiative to
change
 their financial condition. let's discuss both views and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
.
Firstly
, To acquire
money
 one has to work on improving skills . So that they can get high-paying
jobs
 . ,
Moreover
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 it will
change
 their fortunes and they will become financially well .
For instance
countries
 like
china
 where the population is large concentrate on making people skilful so that they can improve their lifestyle. Specifically manufacturing industry is working on the skilled workforce available in
china
.
Furthermore
 Skilled workforce will attract more
mnc
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men
 to invest in
countries
 like
china
 where tesla has invested a huge amount of
money
 just to tap high skilled labour force.
Secondly
, If we accept a bad situation or unsatisfactory job we cannot
change
 our financial situation overnight. If we stuck to low-paying
jobs
 and unsatisfactory work environments we have to compromise on our lifestyle.
Furthermore
countries
 like the US where lots of
jobs
 have been outsourced to
countries
 Like India ,
china
 . High-skilled
jobs
 are taken over by Asians. For ,instance silicon valley based startups hire Immigrant workers on H1B visas. So reskilling or upskilling is the solution to getting high-paying
jobs
. In conclusion, Most of the workforce like to
change
 their financial condition by providing high skills to enterprises. By getting upskilled they are contributing to the economy as well by paying huge taxes on their incomes. So In my opinion one has to try to
change
 his fortune by acquiring high-paying
jobs
. That's how the American Middle class has emerged.
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