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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situations such as an, unsatisfactory job or shortge of money. Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Accepting a bad situation financially is a harakiri. One has to improve his or her financial position or try their level best to work on improving their financial conditions. lack of
money
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 creates lots of problems for people who have a shortage of
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. Few people only take initiative to
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 their financial condition. let's discuss both views and
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 I will give my opinion on
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Firstly
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, To acquire
money
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 one has to work on improving skills . So that they can get high-paying
jobs
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 it will
change
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 their fortunes and they will become financially well .
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countries
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 like
china
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 where the population is large concentrate on making people skilful so that they can improve their lifestyle. Specifically manufacturing industry is working on the skilled workforce available in
china
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 Skilled workforce will attract more
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men
 to invest in
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 like
china
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 where tesla has invested a huge amount of
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 just to tap high skilled labour force.
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, If we accept a bad situation or unsatisfactory job we cannot
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 our financial situation overnight. If we stuck to low-paying
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 and unsatisfactory work environments we have to compromise on our lifestyle.
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countries
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 like the US where lots of
jobs
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 have been outsourced to
countries
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 Like India ,
china
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 . High-skilled
jobs
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 are taken over by Asians. For ,instance silicon valley based startups hire Immigrant workers on H1B visas. So reskilling or upskilling is the solution to getting high-paying
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. In conclusion, Most of the workforce like to
change
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 their financial condition by providing high skills to enterprises. By getting upskilled they are contributing to the economy as well by paying huge taxes on their incomes. So In my opinion one has to try to
change
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 his fortune by acquiring high-paying
jobs
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. That's how the American Middle class has emerged.
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