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Older people often say that their life was better in the past than it is now. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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A lot of
people
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 belonging to the older generation feel that they had their best
time
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 in the past than now. Personally, I do agree with the fact that many older
people
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 don't feel now as comfortable as when they used to in their olden days.
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 essay will discuss the reasons for it using examples. On the one hand, back in the day
people
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 were not used to being very stressed in their jobs.
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, competition for jobs in those days was not so high as they solely used to depend on farming or working in the industries established in their towns.
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,
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 used to get a lot of free
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 to spend quality
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 with their family and friends
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 a result they used to be very happy with their
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. A recent survey has shown that more than 65% of older
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 are quite unhappy with their
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 compared to decades ago.
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, despite there were not so well-equipped hospitals back
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people
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 did not use to get many health issues.
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, eating organic food kept them fit and healthy which had a direct impact on a stressless
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. To illustrate, a recent study by Sydney university released that less than 34% of old
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 are happy with their current lifestyle. To conclude, basically lead a stressless
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 in their jobs and spend a large quantity of their
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 with family.
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, having a healthy lifestyle by eating more organic food made them feel that the old person community were quite happy in the past than it is now.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adherents
  • predictability
  • responsibilities
  • productivity
  • reduces stress
  • eliminating
  • prioritize
  • spontaneity
  • creativity
  • rigid
  • explore new opportunities
  • adapt to unexpected situations
  • personal growth
  • fulfilling life
  • general structure
  • efficiency
  • predictability
  • creativity
  • adaptability
  • structured routine
  • maintaining order
  • flexibility
  • exploration
  • unpredictability
  • balanced approach
  • professional growth
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