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Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Nowadays, smoking in public fields is the most significant air pollution problem in crowded cities. In some countries, public administration forces the population in their country stop smoking in all public areas. I agree with
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 statement, and the reasons I agree will be discussed in the following paragraph before the conclusion is reached.
Body paragraph 1
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 with, smoking is a niche thing. Some
people
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 love smoking, but some
people
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 do not love it. Smoking has many adverse effects,
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 as lung cancer and making toxic
smoke
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 into the air. Not only
people
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 who
smoke
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 but
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 their family or around
people
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 have
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 effect. In terms of
people
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 who get toxic
smoke
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, they are called
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-smokers.
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, in Bangkok, the capital city of Thailand, the government do not have policies to handle
people
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 who
smoke
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 in public areas;
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, they have the most
second
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-smokers getting lung cancer from smokers in Southeast Asia.
Body paragraph 2
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, Banning smoking in public areas helps reduce waste in public parks. It makes a good environment and wind quality for residents.
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, in Singapore, banning smoking is their policy.
People
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 who
smoke
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 in a public zone will be punished and get a fee. Governments provide smoking zone in public parks. It is easier to store waste from the smoker.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the government that bans smoking in public zones is highly advantageous for the community in their country. It reduces air pollution, waste from a smoker, and
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 smokers are reduced. From that advantage, I truly agree with
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 issue.

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