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In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. Do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 commit
crimes
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 due to several underlying reasons
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 as poverty, anger, alcohol, and so on. Those
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 contain a number of punishments, some of them considered smooth some of them harsh. In some regions, guilties, who are responsible for small
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, are charged by undertaking community service
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 of a
prison
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 reality, and some groups of society members think that everyone must be punished by jail, no matter what they have done. I completely disagree with the statement.
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 of all, it is not acceptable to make
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 away from their families for just small mistakes can be counted as the initial point of enriching the argument. There should be suitable regulations for tiny mistakes.
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, human beings have the tendency to make errors in daily life. These
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 can be listed as parking in the wrong place, brake glass, smoke in an inconvenient area. Those
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 should be punished by fine or community service because those are not
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 as big as murder or theft.
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, if competent authorities were putting everyone in the
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, there would not any
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 on the streets.
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prison
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 for every crime is not appropriate for society.
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, it is basically a waste of time and money.
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, the expenditures of criminals in the
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 are afforded by the community's budgets and meanwhile
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 in
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 do not pay any tax. So,
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 creates a huge waste of money.
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, an individual's criminal record would be filled by
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 for nothing and,
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, the person who experienced
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, cannot be the same cheerful as he/she did before. The burden that they are going to carry out for their whole life is an unforgivable barrier. So,
people
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 have to reconsider the way they punish
people
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. In conclusion, I am strongly against the recommended idea of
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, because of the things that I mentioned above. Everyone in the world should be aware of their rights and have to be conscious that those rights cannot be violated by anybody, even by laws.
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