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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant.

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There were two different maps of
city
hospital
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hospitals
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 in two different years 2007 and 2010 respectively. There were a lot of changes that occurred in 3 years from 2007 to 2010. these maps illustrate the construction progress of
city
 hospital access through the
road
.
Firstly
 discussed in the year 2007, the hospital was located mid of the ring highway and the entrance was made through the hospital
road
 which was connected to the ring lane from the north
side
 and joined to the
city
 highway from the south
side
.
In addition
, there was a shared parking
area
 for the public as well as for staff of the hospital which was located
next
 to the hospital
road
 and the entry for parking was at the ring
road
. Now we talked about the year 2010, with the changes that occurred in the hospital
area
. The
city
 hospital was located at the same place but they made different parking areas, the old parking
area
 was now just for staff and there was a new parking
area
 for the public which is located on the east
side
 of the ring
road
 with an entrance.
Furthermore
, they
also
 build roundabouts on each
side
 of the hospital expressway and on the west
side
 of the
road
, they made a bus station with the excess from both roundabouts.
Hence
, there were some important changes that occurred on the map over two different years as well as they provide more space for parking and making it easy excess for the public by relocating the bus station.
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