some people think that single sex schools perform better academically. others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adults life. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

The phenomenon of which is better for children's development between single-sex
schools
and mixed
schools
has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
issue in question may be, I believe that pupils studying with different gender
people
would bring more benefits to them. On one hand, many
people
argue that single-sex
schools
are the best option for children because they can study without attraction from the opposite sex. In recent years, the age of becoming a lover is lower and lower.
However
, not everyone is able to handle their
time
well.
For example
, some
people
may spend too much
time
on their appearance in order to please another boy or girl. It in turn reduces their learning
time
, and worse they lose the chance to get into a university.
Therefore
, they are actually reducing their option in the future through their studies.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is significant to learn the difference between men and women and how to communicate with different gender
people
for the purpose of providing
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all-around education and preparing for the future. In Hong Kong, it is normal that boys and girls to work together in the same company. To avoid some unnecessary problems like sexual harassment, it is greater to allow students
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the difference from others at an early stage.
As a result
, they will have a better career path. Under
this
line of thinking,
although
there is a chance that children will lose
time
on studying, mixed
schools
provide a valuable education
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unreplaceable.
Besides
, two kids becoming a couple is not definitely will have
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affect
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. So, I personally believe that mixed
schools
would bring us more benefits.
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