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Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world’s forests amounts to death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I am in consummate accord with the statement that, the Earth’s natural green reserves purify its atmosphere and function synonymously as
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the mammalian lungs. I
also
 advocate the view that,
forest
destruction
 will ruin our present world.
Firstly
, from our basic knowledge of plant physiology, it can be restated that, plants by the process of photosynthesis convert harmful carbon-dioxide gas into Oxygen, without which life cannot exist.
Thus
 from a wider perspective, it can be stated that the earth’s province purifies the atmosphere and thereby help in sustaining life.
Secondly
, environmentalists have proven that the rapid
destruction
 of forests is
also
 a leading cause of global warming.
Hence
, the
destruction
 of the natural green reserves may lead to
such
 a surge in the global temperature that agricultural land may become arid, leading to widespread famine and deaths.
Thirdly
, forests
also
 house diverse forms of life and these would become extinct if we continue to destroy their natural habitats.
Furthermore
, scientific research has proven that
forest
 ecosystem act as natural scavengers and by the process of biodegradation,
forest
 ecology helps in producing crude oil, which fuels our modern world and its unavailability is unimaginable as
this
 will directly catalyse a global economic crisis.
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 forests are
also
 a source of numerous medicinal plants, from which varieties of modern medicines are produced; Quinine, an antimalarial drug, produced from the barks of Cinchona trees is the best possible example.
Hence
forest
destruction
 will
also
 be a bane for the medical community.
Thus
 the harmony of the present wonderful will be ruined if our natural green reserves are continuously destroyed and there is a theoretical possibility that the blue planet might become lifeless if these green lungs are totally wiped out.
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