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Nowadays an increasing number of people are changing their careers during their working life period. what are the reasons behind this trend? it generally positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays,
people
 often change their
careers
 to be able to afford the rapidly increasing cost of living. In
this
 essay, we will analyse the reasons behind
people
 changing
careers
 and whether it is a positive or a negative trend. In modern society, there is increasing competition in every field. Many
people
 even go to other countries for
jobs
.
This
 is all because
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 the world is developing very fast and skilled
people
 are in demand all over the world in almost every profession. Many
people
 are in search of
jobs
 mainly in large companies. The
people
 who are already in
jobs
 may be fired if the company find more skilled workers.
Then
, the fired
employees
 would have to find another company for a career.
Similarly
, there are many
people
 who do government
jobs
. If government
employees
 are sent to another state for
work
, it may not be convenient for the
employees
 and they are forced to quit and search for a new job. So, sending
employees
 to other places for
work
also
 can be a reason. Most of the time,
this
 changing career trend does not go as planned. When
people
 are in search of new
careers
, they may not find a better job than their old one. Some may not even find a job at all for a very long time. So,
this
 trend is more negative than it is positive. In conclusion,
people
 should
work
 hard and even
work
 overtime to protect their
careers
. They should establish a good status for themselves in the profession they are in.
This
 way,
people
 can get a high-paying salary too.
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