Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
think that increasing price
of sugary foods and drinksCorrect article usage
the price
,
leads to Remove the comma
apply
decline
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a decline
consumption
of these types of foods. While, others, myself including
, have Wrong verb form
included
different
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a different
point
of view about Fix the agreement mistake
points
this
.
On the on
hand, according to the Correct your spelling
one
one
economical theory, there is a Correct pronoun usage
apply
contrast
relationship between products' Change the verb form
contrasting
price
and demand for them. In other words
, whenever the price
of the
one good is Correct article usage
apply
being
increased, Unnecessary verb
apply
people
's tendencies
for purchasingFix the agreement mistake
tendency
,
will start to decline. Remove the comma
apply
As a result
, the consumption
of that product will be declined during
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over
time
. Add an article
the time
For example
, a peiular
sugary drink Correct your spelling
peculiar
popular
which its
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whose
price
was 1 dollar in
the Change preposition
apply
last
year, this
year, because of some new regulations which are introduced by the government, is raised. So, its consumption
in
being dropped.
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is
On the other hand
, there are some reasons that this
policy does not effect
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affect
on
the amount of Change preposition
apply
consumption
. Firstly
, most of
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people
cannot change their diet habits owing to Add an article
the people
high
cost. By Correct article usage
the high
this
I mean, when price
of a product raise, not only they do not decrease their demand, but Add an article
the price
also
they adopt
themselves Correct your spelling
adapt
with
new Change preposition
to
cirrcumastance
. Correct your spelling
circumstance
circumstances
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, the vital role of Correct your spelling
Furthermore
will-power
should not be overlooked. It means, having a healthy diet requires Correct your spelling
willpower
a
regular practice which Correct article usage
apply
do
not be affected Change the verb form
does
through
any condition. Change preposition
by
For instance
, someone who has a poor will-power
, and lives Correct your spelling
willpower
sugary
food, even if Change preposition
on sugary
prices
of these foods Correct article usage
the prices
increas
, Correct your spelling
increase
he
might not be declined his Correct pronoun usage
apply
consumption
.
To sum up, in my opinion, there are some reasons that
the enhancing Correct word choice
why
price
of some products which are sugary cannot contribute to decreasing their usages
. Reasons Fix the agreement mistake
usage
such
as people
adaptation and poor Change noun form
people's
will-power
are two of the prominent ones.Correct your spelling
willpower
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