Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes ( for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to young children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, some people still argued that volunteer work should be mandatory
on
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because it will be useful to society. In my opinion,I completely disagree with Remove the comma
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both statements will be discussed and given some reasons to support my opinion.
I think that the addition of mandatory public works has some disadvantages. Add a comma
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Firstly
, volunteering would take up most of the time, as
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and as
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result students will not have enough time Correct article usage
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In other words
, their academic performance will going
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as promoting the neighborhood
or training kids.Change the spelling
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For example
, if students spend a lot of time on such
extracurricular activities and their academic performance decreases, they will try to avoid them.
On the other hand
, people believe that if children will take part in such
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it will improve their social skills Fix the agreement mistake
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knowledge about global problems. Correct your spelling
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For example
, if schools add volunteering as a mandatory program, one of the
young minds will be able to find a solution to any problem of humanity. Correct article usage
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In other words
, it will help a person to take a step into
a better future.
In conclusion, including social service Change preposition
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the training program will bring advantages to the younger generation and improve their practical knowledge. Change preposition
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volunteer work would be useful if children truly want to be a part of it.Add a comma
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